Poetry Monday Valentine’s Day Contest: “Pencil and Pen – A Composed Love Story”

February 12, 2012 61 Comments by Renee M. LaTulippe

Hi there! Hope I didn’t spook anyone by showing up in your mailbox a whole day early, but it’s a special occasion!

I’m not much for entering contests, and writing contests in particular usually make me shudder. There’s nothing like a story starter or writing prompt or rigid set of rules to make by brain seize up and all creativity flow directly out of my socks.

"Hearts" by Deborah Ciolli

"Hearts" by Deborah Ciolli

But today I am making an exception, because Susanna Leonard Hill wants me to. She’s gone and put up a contest that piqued my interest, darn it! I had no choice but to rise to the challenge. To whit:

VALENTINE’S DAY CONTEST
Write a children’s story, poetry or prose, about unlikely Valentines.
Maximum 200 words.

That’s it! I can handle that!

As of now: GO HERE TO READ THE ENTRIES

And on February 14: GO HERE TO VOTE

Now gather ’round, get cozy with your teddy bears, and enjoy my little ditty of 187 words: “Pencil and Pen: A Composed Love Story.”



Pencil and Pen: A Composed Love Story

Said Pen to Pencil, casually:
What do you think of you and me?

Said Pencil, in a righteous huff:

You? You’re too indelible!
I really couldn’t deal.
You put things down on paper
that then you can’t repeal!

I find that irresponsible!
Take heed of this one phrase:
You’ll never, ever win me
till you mend your inky ways.

Said Pen to Pencil, low and gruff:

And you, my dear? Irresolute!
You clearly can’t commit.
You hem and haw, then turn around
and rub out what you writ!

You can’t be trusted, fickle one,
your word is a disgrace,
so any thoughts you had of love
you might as well erase.

Arrogant!
Ambiguous!
Imperious! You cad!

Ambivalent!
Impertinent!
Precarious! You’re mad!

…………….

Said Pen:
I find you irresistible,
you gorgeous graphite girl.
He drew a heart around her
in an everlasting swirl.

Said Pencil:
I think you might be lovable;
I think it’s you I choose.
Then she colored in his heart
with a million subtle hues.

They’ve been together ever since,
their lives one long embrace,
and raised eight little scribbles
in their blissful, cozy case.

"Warriors of Love" by Deborah Ciolli

"Warriors of Love" by Deborah Ciolli

Valentine’s Day + Pencil and Pen Activities

Video Location: Baratti, Italy.

See more poems in my poetry video library.
 
“Pencil and Pen: A Composed Love Story” Copyright © 2012 Renée LaTulippe
Ceramics by Deborah Ciolli. I’ll be interviewing Deborah and her crazy cats next week! 

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59 Comments

  1. Joanna Marple
    949 days ago

    Oh what writerly wit. I LOVE this poem. I was happily surprised by the happy ending. This is going to take some beating!

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    • Renee LaTulippe
      949 days ago

      Hehe. I couldn’t resist, Joanna. And I was surprised by the happy ending, too — the poem just took me there!

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  2. Rebecca Colby
    949 days ago

    So appropo for a writer! Such passion here–both before and after they fall in love. And the rhyme is superb! Loved it! Great stuff!

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  3. Catherine Johnson
    949 days ago

    Wonderful! I think it’s fantastic that you can do this on video and what a super poem. What fun!

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    • Renee LaTulippe
      949 days ago

      Thanks, Catherine. This one was actually a really hard read, what with the fight and all. Took me forever, and I was FREEZING, haha!

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  4. Delores
    949 days ago

    This is superb and a video to boot. I love this story.

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  5. Natalie
    949 days ago

    Wow! I didn’t realize you were going to video this one too! Now you’re making us all look like slackers! THANKS, Lady! :) You know I love the poem! Smart, sophisticated and clever as always!

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    • Renee LaTulippe
      948 days ago

      Well of COURSE I did a video – it’s Poetry Monday, after all! I just killed two birds with one stone. Poor birdies!

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  6. Heather
    949 days ago

    I love it! What a clever, unusual couple to write about. Your rhymes are beautiful.

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  7. Cathy Mealey
    949 days ago

    A video AND activities? Heaven help us Renee! Love your inky graphite pair and their tempestuous courtship! Fabulous how you used the text to indicate the speaker.

    You are so like me – we cannot resist Susanna’s siren submissions call no matter how difficult a challenge she poses!

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    • Renee LaTulippe
      948 days ago

      @ Heather – Thank you! I thoroughly enjoyed your entry as well!

      @ Cathy – I know! I just couldn’t paddle away fast enough, I guess!

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  8. Hannah
    949 days ago

    LOL! I love it, and your reading was great fun. Oh, I know I shouldn’t have started going through my reader until I posted my own poem. But I couldn’t help myself and I’m glad I did. My favorite line is “you gorgeous graphite girl!”

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  9. Rebecca Fyfe
    949 days ago

    So witty! I love this! As a writer, the concept of pen and pencil isn’t lost on me either. :)

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    • Renee LaTulippe
      948 days ago

      @ Hannah – I think that’s my fave line, too, Hannah. Pen is such a pencil’s man!

      @ Rebecca – Glad you like it! :)

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  10. Penny Klostermann
    949 days ago

    Renee,
    You are just oozing with talent and cleverness. The video was such fun. That is incredible! The ending is precious. I heart your poem.

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  11. Tracy Bermeo
    949 days ago

    I can totally see this conversation happening between a pen and a pencil. I love it!

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    • Renee LaTulippe
      948 days ago

      @ Penny – Aw, you always say the nicest things! I loved Frankenstein, too. :)

      @ Tracy – Rivals to the end…

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  12. Linda Baie
    949 days ago

    Oh, this is so clever,
    I don’t think I’d ever, ever
    write with pens.
    The pencil always wins!
    (Sorry, you inspired me to respond in kind.) I will keep this for writing workshop and my students. I hope you don’t mind my sharing. And, the video is also such a great example of staging drama. Thanks for a happy post to read on Sunday night.

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  13. Vivian Kirkfield
    949 days ago

    Hi Renee,
    I guess I’m not surprised…even though I don’t know you…I kind of knew yours would be FANTASTIC!
    Love the words, love the rhyme, love the story from beginning to end.
    And the activities and resources are GREAT!
    I couldn’t get the sound to work on the video…obviously a problem on my end…but I will keep at it…doing video clips for YouTube is something I know I need to learn to do. :)

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    • Renee LaTulippe
      948 days ago

      @ Linda – Are you kidding? I would be honored if you shared the poem with your students! Thank you so much!

      @ Vivian – Aw, shucks, thanks for all your kind words. So glad you liked it. Bummer about the video. Maybe you could try going directly to my YouTube channel and trying it from there: http://www.youtube.com/user/NoWaterRiver?feature=mhee

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  14. patientdreamer
    948 days ago

    oh wow! oh wow! Then again I am not surprised, you always do such a beautiful job. Thankyou for this lovely poem.

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  15. Tina Cho
    948 days ago

    Very cute and creative! Love how the pencil can’t “commit.”
    Happy Valentine’s Day!

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    • Renee LaTulippe
      948 days ago

      @ Diane – So glad you enjoyed it!

      @ Tina – Welcome to NWR. Pencils are so wishy-washy!

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  16. Erik This Kid Reviews Books
    948 days ago

    THIS IS SO COOL! I actually was thinking about doing my poem about a pencil and paper but I couldn’t it figure out . I really like how they are fighting back and forth then have a happy ending!

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    • Renee LaTulippe
      948 days ago

      You should definitely give it another go, Erik. I admit this one took some wrangling before I got it to behave!

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  17. Susanna Leonard Hill
    948 days ago

    Great poem, Renee! So clever! I think my favorite line is “You hem and haw then turn around and rub out what you writ!”… but it’s pretty hard to choose! It’s especially fun to get to hear you read it – brings it to life so much! Thanks so much for bending you contest rules and joining the fun! :)

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    • Renee LaTulippe
      948 days ago

      Thanks, Susanna! That line is thanks to Natalie Fischer, who didn’t like the original line I had there — this was my second attempt. She MADE me change it, and I’m so glad I did. That’s what’s so great about having fabulous critique partners.

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  18. Alison Hertz
    948 days ago

    Soo funny. I love that you can whip out smart alecky poetry soo quickly.

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  19. Stacy Jensen
    948 days ago

    I’m so glad you couldn’t resist. It’s great!

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  20. Louise
    948 days ago

    Great Poem! It’s a winner!

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    • Renee LaTulippe
      948 days ago

      @ Alison – Ah, my years of being a sarcastic smart aleck have finally paid off. Huzzah! Now go tell my mother! :)

      @ Stacy @ Louise – Thanks to you both. Glad you enjoyed it!

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  21. David
    948 days ago

    You better win the damn contest! I hate Valentine’s Day but loved it anyway. I am most definitely a pen and do the NY Times crossword in pen every day!

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    • Renee LaTulippe
      948 days ago

      I’m not much for Vday either, David. And I’m a pen too! In fact, to introduce the poem, I was going to write about how I always did the NYT crosswords in pen, too — great minds and all that! :)

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  22. Donna Martin
    948 days ago

    OMG! I love, love LOVE this, Renee! I haven’t even read any other entries yet and I hope you win!…;0)

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    • Renee LaTulippe
      948 days ago

      Wow, thank you very much, Donna! But go read the other entries, too. Everyone came up with really fun stuff!

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  23. Iza Trapani
    948 days ago

    I LOVE this poem! One great line after another- so wonderfully witty! A winner for sure.

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  24. Patricia Tilton
    948 days ago

    Great entry Renee. Very unique and creative! I loved the ending, So many fun entires.

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  25. Alison Hertz
    948 days ago

    Love it!

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  26. Jennifer Young
    948 days ago

    Renee that was wonderful. Thanks for sharing

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    • Renee LaTulippe
      948 days ago

      @ Pat, Alison, Jennifer — A million thanks! Glad you enjoyed it!

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  27. clarbojahn
    948 days ago

    Another fantastic entry! It’s going to be hard for Susanna to pick a winner. You should be proud of yourself for doing such a great job. Well done, Renee. I’m so glad you posted early. I did a special post, too. :)

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    • Renee LaTulippe
      948 days ago

      Thanks so much, Clar! I enjoyed reading yours yesterday, and left a comment on it. Yes, I’m glad I’m not Susanna…:)

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  28. Miranda Paul
    948 days ago

    Witty and wonderful, Renee! I took a break from packing to read this. Great job!

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  29. Eric Van Raepenbusch
    948 days ago

    Loved the whole poem — and I chuckled out loud at the line “I find you irresistible, you gorgeous graphite girl.” You are very talented!
    So — glad you read the poem too.

    What else can I say — It was fabulous!

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  30. Amy Dixon
    948 days ago

    Oh my, Renee! So clever! I am terrible with rhyme, so I am in awe. Good job!

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  31. Margaret Greanias
    948 days ago

    Awesome poem, Renee! There are so many lines that I loved. Great rhyming and I loved their personalities. :-)

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  32. Sylvia Liu
    947 days ago

    I love the poem. It’s so witty and the pen and pencil are such great characters. Thanks also for stopping by my blog. I love meeting fellow PB makers.

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  33. Ben
    947 days ago

    Thats a cool take on a pencil and a pen’s reaction to eachother.

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  34. Sandi Hershenson
    947 days ago

    I truly enjoy your blog! I have awarded you the Liebster Blog Award! Please visit my blog to learn more.

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  35. Rena J. Traxel
    946 days ago

    Cute!

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  36. Dana Carey
    945 days ago

    I hope you had a great Valentine’s Day, Renée. Thanks for the poem– I <3 it of course. I wondered how'd you'd manage to bring them together in the end and you did–perfectly!

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    • Dana Carey
      945 days ago

      “how” not “how’d” Wow. I’m tired today!

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  37. Elizabeth Stevens Omlor
    945 days ago

    You are so talented! Beautiful story! I love your blog!

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  38. Mary Lee
    943 days ago

    Ha! I loved the scribbles at the end!

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